Hallo liebe Unbekannte
Ich hab mir grad mal gedacht, dass ich so nett bin und ein paar Fehler korrigieren werde. Ich schreibe das korrigerte einfach in einer anderen Farbe.
Dear Hostfamily,
I am *** and 16 Years old.
But almost everybody calls me Lissi.
First I want to thank you so much that you are thinking aboutchoosing me and that you want me to stay in your home for 10 month. Anmerkung: Den Satz wenn möglich ein bisschen verkürzen I am very happy about that and I know it is a big responsibility.
In this letter I would like you to tell you something about me, my family and my hobbies.
I was born on 8th Mai 1994 in Münster.That means, that I will be 17, when we meet in summer. My parents and Ilive in a small house in ***. *** is a little town and has about 1000 inhabitants. Münster is maybe 25 minutes awayfrom ***. You can reach itby bus or car. I like Münster very much. It isn't too small and not too big. You can come easily go from one point to the other. Moreoveryou can visit a lot of places in the city-centre.
My mom, ***, wasborn in ***, and livedin Germany since she was 22 years old. She works at a office, but i don't know what she exactly does.Anmerkung: Du solltest nicht sagen, dass du nicht weißt was sie macht, weil sich das uninteressiert anhört. Du könntest es entweder ganz rauslassen oder deine Mutter fragen und es dann mit einfügen.
My dad, ***, wasborn in Germany. Earlier, he workedat a restaurant, but know he is workingat anoffice and repairs computer.
I have an older sister, ***. she is 23 years old and lives with herboyfriend and her son, ***, 2 streets away from me. She works at a Nursing home. My Nephew *** is 3 years old and I spend a lot of time with him. They come everyday to us and we eat cake or do other things together. It is always funny with them. My mom and I do a lot of things with ***, for example we go to Zoo with him or go swimming. *** is like a little brother for me.
I have a really good realtionship with my parents. With my sister and her boyfriend, I have a godd relationship aswell. From time to time I do sth with them. I went into a skiinghall with them or go to city, for example.
My family loves travelling. We have travelled to many European countries. We especially like Portugal and Austrian so we go there almost every year.
Now I’ll describe a little bit of myself:
When I first meet you, I’ll probably be shy and reserved. But I think that will change as soon as I've got to know you better. I’m a person who is very inquisitive and likes to laugh and do jokes, but sometimes I’m a bit shy and a BIT untidily. I’m a normal teenage girl I’d say.
Here, I go to a school which is called “**** Realschule”. It’s something like the Junior High and the High School together. My school has 1 000 pupils and I am in the 9th Grade. Im in a special class, it is called Laptop class. We do everything with the laptop, almost all School hours. In my class are 30 pupils and most of my better friends are in this class, too. I’m very lucky with my class and I think we have a great class spirit.
At school we can’t choose the courses we want to. Every pupil has to take the same courses. We can only choose whether we want to take French, Informatik, Bilogy orSocial works. I have been learning English for 5 and a half years.
In my free-time I enjoy reading books (I don’t have a favorite book but I like love stories, for example the Twilight Saga or other). I like listening to music but I for myself don’t play aninstrument. I played the flute for 3 years (I started when I was 7). I would like to learn playing the piano, Maybe I’ll start someday.
I enjoy spending time with my friends. I like going to the cinema with them, to Christmas markets, going shopping or baking some tasty cookies together for example. I have 2 best friends who are bothgirls and their names are *** (16) and *** (15). Im afraid that *** live about 10 miles away from me and so we only meet in school and at the weekends.Anmerkung: Der Satz ist mir irgendwie unverständlich, weil du ja sagst, dass du Angst hast, dass *** 10Meilen von dir weg wohnt.
In the moment I don’t do any other sports thanschool sport, but I think about starting to play badminton.
Maybe you are wondering why I want to live in another country for one year
Because I want to become acquainted absolute with a new culture and not just like a tourist.
I want to learn more about the American people and the american culture.
And, of course, I want to upgrade my English, which is not so good and in the moment, also it would help me to improve my English Anmerkung: upgrade your english and improve your english ist finde ich genau dasselbse, von daher solltest du überlegen ob du nicht einen Teilsatz rauslässt. I don’t mind if you have many children, or none, if you are retired persons or very young, if you have pets or none if you live in a big or in a small village. I’m open for everything. I've choosen the USA, because it’s one of my favourite countries.
I hope we will meet next year and I'm sure we will have a great time together.
With best
wishes from Germany
**** t
=> Den Brief an sich finde ich sonst ziemlich, weil du viel von dir selbst und deiner Familie erzählt hast. Ich habe dir mal ein paar Sachen verbessert bzw. dir Verbesserungsvorschläge hingeschrieben. Kannst ja gucken was du machst, aber nicht vergessen: Alle Angaben wie immer ohne Gewähr Und mach dir keine Sorgen, dass dein Englisch nicht ganz so gut ist - du wirst es schneller lernen als du denkst.
P.S. Ich hoffe das mit der Farbänderung hat geklappt